Re-telling of Rousie

There is a girl named Rousie who lives in a Farm, and on October her dad brought a mob of sheep to get ready for them to be sheared. They have used the dads old horse Zhivago and the dogs to gather all the sheep in. Rousie has to wake up early at 6.00am and go to the shed to take the shorn fleeces from the stand and getting all the sheep together for the shearing since there are 15000 of them! Her job is to clear out all the wool off the floor for the shearers. Rousie worked all the way through till lunch, she drinks smoko then goes back to cleaning. At the end of the day it was time for the truck to load, and to let the sheeps out, and she watched the truck drive away. Rousie was proud and happy because the bales meant money to run the farm.  

Jordenne Roller Coaster Narrative

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Clear And 'Juicy'	Some of my writing can be understood by my audience.	My message is able to be understood, and my writing does not turn off the audience.	My writing has audience appeal and the message is very clear.
Content	I've attempted to write about one main idea.	I have a key idea in the first sentence with supporting details in the following sentences.	I've used sentences that are connected and build up the main idea
Sentence Beginnings	I've attempted to use more than one varied sentence beginning.	I have a key idea in the first sentence with supporting details in the following sentences.	I've used carefully chosen vocabulary/clauses as sentence beginnings.
Variety of sentences	I've attempted to use a variety of sentence types, lengths or complexities.	I've used a variety of sentence types (.?!"") and sentence lengths and complexities	I've carefully chosen a variety of sentence types, lengths & complexities to enhance the paragraph.
Vocabulary	I've attempted to use some clever vocabulary.	I've chosen some clever vocabulary and have tried to use it appropriately.	I've carefully chosen clever vocabulary and have used it appropriately.

“Please, please mum!” cried the the twins (Jasmine and Kate). “No! I have told you both you are coming with us, on a family trip!. So come and help me carry these bags” Jasmine and Kate looked at each other. “What are the bags for??” “For our food” answered the mum (Jamie). “But…..” “No I know what you’re thinking, so we are not eating stuff from the carnival. Today we are eating healthy”

Jasmine and Kate rolled their eyes “Gooosh!” And they stomped their way into the car. “Mike!!! Josh!! Hurry up we’re going now” Mike (dad) and Josh (son) was doing their hair. They got the gel and wax and wiped it on every single part of their hair, and brushed it again. They walked outside with Mohawk. The mum was going to say take it out but it was too late, they had to go.

“Lets get this party started!” Josh shouted as he hopped in the car. Jasmine and Kate still begged their mum. “But mum…..our friends Jackson, Kelly and Rachel are going to be there” Jamie looked back at them and said “Oh great! Then they can come with us” Jasmine mumbled and said “But we don’t want to go with you” Josh heard and shouted “Oooooohhhh mum!” Jasmine grabbed him and blocked his mouth with her hands. “Yes Josh” Jasmine looked at her mum and smiled “Nothing mum, nothing” Jasmine looked down at Josh and gave him the evils. So she blocked his mouth the whole way.

“Wow! It looks awesome!” Mike said. “We’re gonna have heaps of fun! Oh look at that roller coaster. It’s HUGE!!” Mike said again excitedly. Jasmine took her hands off Josh’s mouth and jumped “Eeeeewww!! There are slobs everywhere on my hand! And it smells disgusting. Ew! Please, please say yes Josh. Did you….” She paused for a second then continued “Brush...your...teeth?!” Josh looked at Jasmine and said “Yes” Jasmine screamed and said “Aaaaahhhh!! He didn’t brush his teeth!!” Jamie got some tissues and grabbed Jasmines hands. “Get over here! You're embarrassing yourself” And she wiped it off. “What was it” “Uhm…..” Jamie looked at her angrily but then Jasmine was saved when Jamie her friend and hugged her.

They had to wait for her. Kate jumped up and said to her twin. “Jasmine I have an idea!” She whispered it into her ears. “Brilliant!” Mum looked at her and said “What?” Kate covered for her and said “Uhm...It’s great for us to be here as a family” The mum looked at her friend and said “Thats weird?? They didn’t want to come” They both laughed.

Jasmine and Kate looked at Josh and smiled but one big evil smile. Josh was scared and said “What?” Jasmine bent down and giggled “You want 50 bux?” Josh smile and nodded. Then Kate said “You do...if you want it run away!” Josh turned that smile upside down and said “But…...Oookay” They gave him $50.00 and he ran away.

“Ok, bye Josie” Jamie waved. “So let’s go!” They all walked and the two twins smiled and fist pumped each other. When they got to the Dodgems Jasmine and Kate saw their friends Jackson, Kelly and Rachel then they cried “Mum, Dad! Where is Josh!?” They frightenly looked at them. “I thought you had them!?” The mum shouted. “Well, lets go look for him!” Jamie and Mike ran everywhere looking for Josh.

Jasmine and Kate waved at their friends and told them to come. “Hey guys!” said the two twins. They all hugged each other and started talking. About 5 minutes later the parents were still looking and searching. “Josh! Josh! Where are you!?!?” Jamie shouted. “Oh look! I can see a little boy!” They ran towards the boy and told him to look up. “Josh? Honey is that you?” The little boy looked up. “Well, close enough” Mike said.

Jamie stared at Mike and said angrily “Hurry up!” They searched everywhere, “Josh! Honey where are you?!” the mum cried. Josie looked up at Mike. “Look up there” Josie stood up and looked. “Is that Josh?” asked Josie. “Yep, yep it is” Mike answered. Josh came down and there, he saw his parents. Then he blocked his face with the candy floss. Josh saw a hand on his candy floss, and it peeled the candy floss away from his face. “Hey mom, hey dad” They both shook their heads and asked “Why?” And he told the parents everything that had happened.

Back to the twins they were riding the Dodgems with their friends. “Aaaahh!” screamed Jasmine. “This is awesome!!” shouted Kelly. When they finished they got out and they saw their parents and Josh. “Oh you found Josh!” They ran up to him and hugged him. “Where have you been? We were all worried about you!” acted the sisters.

“Jasmine, Kate you can stop because we know what happened.” said the mum. “You do? Did Josh tell you?” The parents nodded their heads. “Look mum, we’re sorry, we just wanted to spend time with our friends” Josie looked sad and said “So you want to spend time with them then you’re family?” Then they walked away. The twins felt ashamed of themselves, so Jasmine and Kate ran up to their mum and hugged her. “Mum we are really sorry please forgive us” They smiled at her and the mum replied. “Well….sure ok” They all hugged each other. “This is very sad” Josh cried. “Group hug” Then he jumped in with them.

“Josh, we are sorry too, and sorry for being bad sisters. We love you.” They kissed him and hugged him. “So Josh you wanna go on that ride again” asked the mum. “Yes,yes!” He jumped up. “Let’s all go as a family” The twins said. And they all were happy!

The End

Practice test Narrative

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Clear And 'Juicy'	Some of my writing can be understood by my audience.	My message is able to be understood, and my writing does not turn off the audience.	My writing has audience appeal and the message is very clear.
Content	I've attempted to write about one main idea.	I have a key idea in the first sentence with supporting details in the following sentences.	I've used sentences that are connected and build up the main idea
Sentence Beginnings	I've attempted to use more than one varied sentence beginning.	I have a key idea in the first sentence with supporting details in the following sentences.	I've used carefully chosen vocabulary/clauses as sentence beginnings.
Variety of sentences	I've attempted to use a variety of sentence types, lengths or complexities.	I've used a variety of sentence types (.?!"") and sentence lengths and complexities	I've carefully chosen a variety of sentence types, lengths & complexities to enhance the paragraph.
Vocabulary	I've attempted to use some clever vocabulary.	I've chosen some clever vocabulary and have tried to use it appropriately.	I've carefully chosen clever vocabulary and have used it appropriately.

Title: Never Give Up!

One day, there was a man named John Randal. He owned a paddy field where beautiful rice grew everyday. But he couldn’t work there all by himself. So he decided to drive around town, asking people if they wanted a job in his field.  

There was one man sitting down doing nothing. So John asked “Hey I’m John. I just came to ask if you need a job?”. The man looked up and started coughing and replied “I’m Josh. What kind of job is it?” “Its a paddy field” Josh put one eyebrow up……...to show John that he had no idea what a paddy field was. So John answered “It’s where rice grow” Josh nodded his head and said “Sure……….but you need to teach me how to do it”. John laughed and started walking around with him looking for more people. At around 2 o’clock they found another man walking around the supermarket looking at the food. John and Josh walked up to him and asked “ Hi I’m John and this is Josh. I have a Paddy field and we just came here to ask if you want to work there?”. The man looked up and answered “ I’m Andy. So…...how much do we get paid?” “About $10.00” He replied. “Then lets go!” The 3 walked around looking for more people to work. But when afternoon fell and the moon replaced the sun, it was time for them to go home. “Ok, you guys come tomorrow and there, you will start your job.” So they both nodded their heads and walked off.

The next day at 9:00am John walked outside and saw Josh and Andy. “Morning guys, you can both start now. I will be going to get more workers”. John hopped into the car and drove away. While he was driving he was looking around. About 2 hours later at 11:00am 1 person caught his eye. “Hhhhmmm.. this man should be it” John jumped out of the car and started eavesdropping. “YOU GOT FIRED!!!! Why! Why do you always get fired from a job! You ain’t living with us if you don’t find another job!” The woman slammed the door on his face and he started walking away.

While the man was walking sadly John turned around and said “I’m John. You know I can make that lady proud for you” The man looked at John weirdly and said “How?” John bent down to his ear like he was telling him a secret and whispered “I have a job for you at the paddy field. You know...where you grow..” “Yes, yes I know” So they both hopped inside the car and drove away. “I think you’re gonna like this job, and you're gonna meet heaps of friends” When they got their John parked the car and they both hopped out.

Josh and Andy heard the car so they ran towards it. “Josh and Andy this is…..? Oh I’m sorry I didn’t give you time to introduce yourself. So whats your name?” “I’m Michael” he answered.

“So Michael you're gonna work with these 2 brilliant workers. Well 1 brilliant worker.” So off they went while John drove around and looked for more workers. After days and days, the first 3 workers Josh, Andy and Michael hasn’t been coming to their jobs. Andy was wasting his money by not buying stuff for his family. Michael was showing off his money to his wife. And Josh was just staring at his money, because he had no idea what to do with it.

John waited and waited for them, he looked at his wristwatch and it was passed 9:00am. “Where are those boys??” John was getting a little cranky. “I can’t waste my time waiting for them. I’ll get new workers!!” John went into the car with an angry face and started searching…… again!

While he was searching he saw Andy, Josh and Michael. He hopped out of the car and said “Where have you guys been?” Andy, Josh and Michael looked at each other. “You know John we didn’t really want to work! We wanted money.” John looked angry and drove away. He saw them laughing.

His crops were dying. He was so sad, John was about to give up but then 1 brilliant idea popped inside his head. He got a pen with a lot of papers and started writing. The next day everyone saw a sign up that said “HELP WANTED AT THE PADDY FIELD!” John woke up and heard people outside of his house. He opened the door and saw people with his signs that he has been writing all night long! He smiled and shouted “Come and give me your name. Then lets get started!” Andy, John and Michael walked passed Johns field and saw people!

They ran to John and said “Who are these people?!” John looked at them and replied “Oh Hi guys. These lovely people are my new workers. I’m so sorry I don’t have time because I am busy. Sorry Susy I’m coming!” He shouted. “Should we come back to work?” Josh asked. “No!” Then they walked away feeling bad!!

THE END!

Making Pizza

In Extension we made pizza and it was based on Labour Day. But first we had to plan on what to put on the pizza and get a partner. I partnered up with Iron. Our first idea was pepperoni then cheese......well obviously we do need cheese on our pizza so it doesn't taste dry. Then ham, capsicum and pineapple.

When we finished writing it down.......it was time to make it! Iron got our dough. "Put it down here" I said to her. While she was doing that I went and got the potato paste and spread it around the dough. Next we got the 8 pieces of pepperoni and that represents 8 hours of workers (we couldn't really see the pepperoni after putting on the cheese because our teacher Mrs tele'a spoilt it by growling us to "PUT MORE CHEESE ON!!!!")

I went and got the ham, 1 big piece of ham. So Iron cut the ham and made it into 28 pieces and do you know what that represents? It represents how 28th of October is Labour Day! Capsicum....well we put the capsicum on because it taste yummy just like the pineapple.

After putting all those ingredients on the dough, it was time for it to go into the oven for 15 MINUTES!!!! Iron and I waited and waited until Mrs Tele'a told us it was ready. We walked to our pizza and it looked so BEAUTIFUL!!!

Mrs Tele'a gave me the knife to cut it. I cut it into 8 pieces and that again represents the 8 hours of workers. "Who wants to be nice and take it to one of the teachers?" We all said me. Iron and I were thinking of a teacher. "Oh I know Mrs Nua" We walked into her office and gave it to her. "Hope you enjoy it" We said and we walked back to the kitchen hall.

Next we wanted to give it to our teacher Mrs Tele'a. But then she said "Oh I know you should give it to Miss King she sent someone to give it to her. From the door Miss V came and looked at all of our pizzas. "Those look beautiful" she said. So we thought we could give her one. Iron grabbed one and handed it to her.

It was fun working with Iron! And especially making pizzas for Labour Day!

Farming Fish

In a village called Togori on the Island of Maikra in the Solomon Islands. There is a boy named Richard Bekaraifaka. When their weather is fine and the sea is calm, people go out to sea with their canoes and catch some fish for their families. Richard Bekaraifaka has an uncle called Isaiah who is the chief of their village , he decided that he could make the water from the river flow through the plastic pipes from one pool to the other the back into the river. People thought that he was crazy but they built it anyway. It took to make the pool 1 and a half years! When the pools were finished they had to join the pipes up together with the river. One of Richards favourite jobs was feeding the fish with larvae and white ants. The fish go CRAZY OVER IT!!! They were all so proud of themselves because they can go catch their fish anytime they want.

Retelling An Organic Orchard

Marjorie Clark runs an organic orchard in Kerikeri. Rather than spraying her orchards to keep them healthy. She explained to the school journal editor how organic growing works..... and well.

Marjorie Clark thinks nature is like a whole lot of see-saws. Everything in her orchard is balanced, just how she wanted it to be. She asked, "If you take a big weight off one see-saw, what will happen?". It will go out of control. Just how she used sprays and artificial fertilisers. And she thinks that using those things affects nature. It upsets the natural balance of things.

When she first began not spraying her orchard, things went really wrong, the insect pests that had been killed by the sprayers were coming and all the fruit was being harmed and going rotten. She nearly even got out the sprayers at one point but didn't.

Then the green beetle came, a lot of people in the North are having trouble with them. Green Beetles can be a real problem to orchardists and nut growers. 1 year or 2 the green beetle had almost disappeared from her orchard.   

At the end it all went back to the way she wanted it to be. People has been coming and buying my fruits because its organically grown. She said that if you want your dream to come true. You will really have to believe in something. Then your wish will be granted.

Laser tag and Bowling

THE CONTINUES OF OUR SLEEPOVER……(The Next Day)

“Wake up! Wake up!” Lana shouted. We all stood up and started cleaning our beds. I ran to the bathroom and started brushing my teeth while all of the boys were watching TV. Quickly I wiped my face with the towel and started changing.

Lana was doing our breakfast. “Wow!” I walked to our sitting room and saw heaps of food on the table. I ran and sat down with all my cousins. Before we ate we did the prayer. When we finished the door opened and my cousins came Senila and Samuel.

“Saaaaam!” shouted my cousin Esrah excitedly. “Are you hungry??” Hosannah asked them. “No thanks” Senila answered back. Lana and Fou went to Fous house. When we finished eating we ran outside and started playing.

Xavier rode on my bike and we all played with my rugby ball. About 1 hour later my grandpa shouted “We’re going now, Lana and Fou is here.” Senila, Xavier, Eden and I hopped into Lanas car and we were all squashed. All the other boys were coming with my grandpa.

Off we went. While we were on the road we were talking about how excited we are! “We’re here!” Xavier shouted. We all hopped out and ran inside. We went to the check-out centre to get our tokens. As soon as we got our tokens the boys came. There was one boy missing Samuel.

He had to stay because the car was full. My grandpa went back to get him. When he came that's when the craziness started!!!!

Story tell 'My Tale'

Once there was a little girl named Sina who ran away from her home. Because her mother keeps on growling her.

So she ran off without getting caught by her parents.

A few day later Sina found a home in the middle of nowhere. She walked inside the house and there was a porridge.

She was so hungry that she ran and grabbed a spoon and started eating.

Then she went upstairs and fell asleep.

While Sina was sleeping the door flew wide opened and….3 people came inside.

It was a family of 3. A mother, father and a son. The mother heard something. It sounded like someone was snoring. The mother held the kid back and tracked the voice by her ears.

The mum checked everywhere. But there was only one more room that she hasn’t checked. Her little son’s room. The mom walked slowly and peeked through the door. She was frightened because she saw Sina lying on her son’s bed. The she screamed! "Aaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!" BLANK!

Matching Pictures about the Farm

Today for our activity we had to match pictures and put it together. Since our theme is about Farming it was pictures of animals and more things about the Farm. I didn't really understand some of the pictures. One of the pictures were a snake. A snake in a Farm?? But then Mr Somerville came and explained it.

There was a picture of a snake because that snake is like a worm. Its inside the cows body. It eats the food that the cows eat, and I find that just weird. Do you? Some pictures were some men. I didn't really understood that too. But then I figured it out. Its not about the man its about what the is doing, or where the man is.

When we finished Mr Somerville came and checked it. He changed a few pictures. But we still did a good job. I found that activity quite easy. Here are some of the pictures: 

The sleepover

“I’m sleeping there!” shouted my cousin Erene. “No I am!!! All the boys are sleeping on the ground!!” I shouted back. On Thursday we had a sleepover and I was the only girl. Well my cousins Erene and Esrahs little sisters, Eden whose 5 and Eva whose 3. I didn’t play with them because they were in our other sitting room with my grandma.

I was playing with the boys. Erene and Esrah (brothers), Canaan and Xavier (brothers) and Hosannah. All we did was play wrestling. These boys are sooo naughty when they are all together. My grandma walked and saw all the beds she made for us was all messy. She shook her head and walked back to the sitting room. But she was use to it we always mess stuff up.

Since we were playing wrestling Esrah dragged me to the mattress and I bumped my head on the pillow. Then I stood up and jumped on him. His dad came and we all stopped. He came with some movies.

We all went to our beds and started. And then we had a fight on what to watch. The oldest Erene chose a movie and it was called “We are Marshall”. Everyone went silent. Halfway of the movie we paused it. Because my auntie Lana and her mate (boyfriend) came Fou.

“Go into a circle” she told us. We all formed a circle and looked at her. We played a game called Mickey Mouse. 1 person had to go to the front and turn around the other way. And someone from the circle had to say Mickey Mouse.

I got quite bored of that game and finally we changed it we played Pukana. We played on and on and then Lana and Fou went. And we all started playing rugby in the sitting room. When we got tired we went into our beds and continued watching We are Marshall.

AND THE NEXT DAY WE WENT TO……………

TO BE CONTINUED……...